All the bizarre friends in my head keep me sound,
All the skepticism in my thoughts- makes me sick to the bone,
And I ignite the flames that burn my disguise,
The mask I would rather wear to go through my days,
And I cry with the sound of a million broken smiles,
I cry to get away from there,
I create dreams of the life I would rather have with the resentment of what it could have been,
I become happy with the smallest and silliest things, things that may not even exist in the real world, and yet are so potent in my head,
I’m a mind-boggling version of me, so amazing….so very real…
I’m self-righteous, but I care,
I’m stubborn, but I mature,
I’m selfish, but I love unconditionally,
I’m fixated, yet I unleash,
I’m free, but my feet are well grounded,
I’m an addict, but I’m restrained,
I’m fragile, but I’m strong-minded,
I’m victimized, but I’m optimistic,
I’m imperfect, but I’m sane,
My life….. my problem…
Don’t critic me, correct me,
Don’t pity me, accept me,
Don’t leave me, allow me,
Don’t disregard me, believe me…
16 Mississippi:
Just WOW! No other praise. Awesome!
PS I love ur template!
@ Ms.R.:
Thanks a ton sweetie!! Glad you luved it!!
Well...almost a winner again ! no doubt you have the art to convey too much in too little...the flow was coherent except for a line that says "correct me". I felt that for the personality that was built, it seemed to be too strict a word to accept, given the way he/she looks at life....just a thought !
fab !
Ah, I can empathise with the contradicting ambivalence in this piece. I like the list at the end of clauses.
Lovely.
x
@ Anonymous:
Thank you so much!
And Yeah I do agree a bit! Thanks for your suggestion...
@ Di:
Thanks babe!! Hugs!
@ JenniAsh:
Thanks a ton dear! glad you liked it!
Sweety love the header picture.
Quite like how u have put the complicated saga going on inside your head into words.
xo
@K-ay:
Thank you so much dear! :)
My favorite line.."I become happy with the smallest and silliest things, things that may not even exist in the real world, and yet are so potent in my head." I can relate to that as well! Great work:)
@ Splurgerina:
Thanks dear...that's my favourite line too! :) Keep visiting...
"Don’t critic me, correct me,
Don’t pity me, accept me,
Don’t leave me, allow me,
Don’t disregard me, believe me"
Ha ha ha.. good volley i must say.. :)
@ Harsha:
Thank you so much... :)
Hi Pavitra...
I fell in love with the last four lines of your poem...
Especially “don’t critic me, correct me”
That’s a whole lot of wisdom and art of living rolled into one sentence...
You know I am a BIGGGGGGGGG fan of your poetry like many others are....keep being how you are...we adore you this way:-)
@ Suruchi:
Aww sweetie...love you loads...HUGS!!
Thank you so much for all the compliments...
you know, I look forward to your comments.. :)
I love the way you always write big and elaborated comments....It has a very personized touch to it...and i love that!
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